WINOL 22/02/2012

Our feedback this Wednesday with Richard Burton.

Very collaborative, professional in the gallery

Headlines-

-emphasis of the police story - the tazer should have come before sentence

-tarmac was a bad shot

-wordplay didn't work. The uniqueness was in the lego, not enough drama.

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Education

The King Leer - went too long, not a good shot

Interviews - well edited, got to the point
Straps swept over too quickly

Angus: Getting there with the construction of the story. Great interview with the MP.

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Court

Guilty Building did not evoke 'law court'.

Wanted to hear why it was covered.

Didn't really tell the story of the tazer, which is usp of the vt.

Angus: Banning court reports without pictures! Do it for the site, but don't do it for the bulletin. Link to story was too short. 3 lines for each.

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Water

The river/clump in hand too close together, not edited well enough.

Angus: You had trouble. Best pictures were the last two. Should have been opening shots. Should have shown the water in the river.

Chris: The two shots at end were absolutely excellent, did not need words to tell story.

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Eco Homes

Did not use oppor to show the outside of the houses enough.

The ending shot was not good enough

Angus: Links too short again. What's going on in a carbon neutral house that's different than other houses? Great sound to Dan's voice. Needed Dan inside the house.

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Transport

The images did not connect with the words.

Angus: Link didn't reflect what was going on in the story. Link did not talk about the row. Angle could have been better.

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Sport

Was good of course.

OOV - would have avoided any word already used. Manager twice, maybe change second to boss, etc.

Angus: Gray & Murphy, no shot about them

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Totton

Footage was good. Integrated with the natural noise well.

Angus: So complicated a link it wasn't understandable. Could've been simpler.

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Basingstoke Bison

Angus: I can't fault it. I really can't. I thought it was really - as sports packages go, I'd happily give that to anyone I'm working for and let it run.

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Lego

'lego expert' word play doesn't work in link

Great images

Words didn't give the scale - could have used images to show.

Angus: Terrific start. Cheesiness of the microphone is great. Should have seen a massive pile of bricks. Quantify 150,000 with pictures.

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Overall

Wow, I didn't expect it to be that good! If I was a little audience I'd applause

Angus: Presenters, excellent. Gallery, terrific. Only as good as your last show. We were very good this week, let's keep it up.

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Angus - terrific bulletin

Editorial level stuff needs to be worked on

quality of some news stories still not quite there

Headlines: Getting there with the writing, best pics still aren't there. Need better pictures!